In my last post I sent out a call for help, and my wonderful online friends answered.
This is the ‘before’ blurb:
‘Innerscape is marketed as a digital paradise where the terminally ill live out their lives in young, pain free bodies indistinguishable from the real thing. But Miira Tahn, last Lady of Dhurai, soon discovers that all is not well in paradise; an assassin is stalking the Burning Man, and nothing is what it seems. Together with friends, Kenneth Wu and Jaimie Watson, Miira becomes embroiled in a deadly game of cat and mouse where losing means death. Only by fighting back can she save herself, and those she loves.’
This is the ‘after’ blurb that will accompany the Omnibus onto the Kindle:
Innerscape: a virtual paradise where the terminally ill live out their lives in young, pain free bodies.
But Miira Tahn discovers paradise is an illusion.
An assassin stalks the Burning Man.
Lies masquerade as truth.
Together with her friends, Miira plunges into a deadly game of cat and mouse.
If she loses, she loses everything.
Her life – Those she loves – All of Innerscape.
So much better. 😀
My thanks to Yorgos, Dawn, Carol, Audrey, Cage, Elizabeth, Chris J and Chris G. You turned a sow’s ear into a silk purse. I love you all. 🙂
Meeks
April 14th, 2020 at 11:46 pm
I love the brevity. It works!
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April 15th, 2020 at 8:49 am
Thanks, Candy. The Blurb Gurus did an amazing job. 🙂
How are things going in New York? Are you okay?
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April 14th, 2020 at 3:11 am
Great blurb!
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April 14th, 2020 at 2:42 pm
-grin- my thanks to the midwives, one and all. 🙂
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April 13th, 2020 at 11:59 pm
What a difference, huh? I hate writing blurbs. They’re so hard and so important. Congrats on the new omnibus! It’s a great story. 🙂
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April 14th, 2020 at 2:45 pm
Thanks Diana. I hate writing them too. Thank god for clever friends. It was not until I saw the ‘after’ that I could see what was missing from the ‘before’. Neither the cover nor the blurb would be anywhere near as good without that very generous input.
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April 14th, 2020 at 11:16 pm
I didn’t see your call for help otherwise I would have taken a stab at it. But the result is great so you had some excellent feedback. Blogger/authors are wonderful. 🙂
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April 15th, 2020 at 8:51 am
I’m glad you like it. Writing blurbs is an art form. I’m so grateful to have a community of brilliant people to call on for help. 🙂
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April 13th, 2020 at 6:41 pm
perfection. I don’t really see i did much to help, but, whatever small part I played, hurrah! and you are very welcome 😉
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April 13th, 2020 at 8:01 pm
I owe the ‘virtual’ paradise to you. -hugs-
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April 13th, 2020 at 10:11 am
I agree with everyone else. That’s great!
Clear, fast pacing, more intense, and hence more enticing!
And also, I think you’ve found a great way to use “virtual” as it can mean both that it’s “virtual reality” and “not really a paradise” 🤓
Great job! 👏👏🥳😁
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April 13th, 2020 at 12:53 am
Wowzer! Impressive….👍
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April 13th, 2020 at 1:41 pm
Hah! I wish I could take credit for the blurb but it really was the result of a lot of very clever writers coming together. I’m thrilled by the result. 🙂
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April 12th, 2020 at 11:16 pm
Yes, much better. ❤
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April 13th, 2020 at 1:39 pm
-hugs- Thanks, Yvonne! Is everything okay in your part of the world?
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April 13th, 2020 at 10:17 pm
We’re getting by. I really miss having coffee with friends bit that’s the new reality for the time being. I wish we had closed the border with the U.S. sooner. Stay well.
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April 14th, 2020 at 2:47 pm
-sigh- Politics gets in the way of good sense sometimes. I’m having a very ordinary cup of instant Nescafe, but cheers! 🙂
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April 12th, 2020 at 10:48 pm
Now THAT is a GREAT blurb, Meeks – 5 thumbs up 👍👍👍👍👍
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April 13th, 2020 at 1:39 pm
-grin- I know, and it’s all thanks to you guys. Just clicked the ‘publish’ button on KDP. 😀
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April 13th, 2020 at 4:08 pm
👍❤️
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